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PostSubject: Orange's Story   Fri Jul 12, 2013 3:01 pm

This is a story about my brother that I wrote a while ago. I'm posting this because I'm bored and have nothing else to do. Be warned the Grammar and spelling are pretty bad.

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PostSubject: Re: Orange's Story   Fri Jul 12, 2013 3:51 pm

A fairly simple (in terms of plot and other elements), though entertaining story. Grammar and spelling are easily fixed with an editor, so it's not a problem. Since it's chapter one, I'm assuming there's a chapter two.
Since I've written fiction of my own and posted it on various sites, I can be even more critical if ya wish.
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PostSubject: Re: Orange's Story   Fri Jul 12, 2013 4:12 pm

Thanks for actually reading it Caesar! Since you mentioned it I'll add chapter two in right now. It gets really weird though. lol
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PostSubject: Re: Orange's Story   Fri Jul 12, 2013 4:28 pm

It's obviously not intended to be a work of art, so I won't criticize it as such like most critics try to do.
And when I say that, there's not much to mention other than grammar and spelling.
All in all, it's an short, entertaining interlude.
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PostSubject: Re: Orange's Story   Fri Jul 12, 2013 5:10 pm

It wont let me add Chp 7 so im putting it here.

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PostSubject: Re: Orange's Story   Sun Jul 28, 2013 2:22 am

Nice story :p

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